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Sinners - your favorite Sin's tale

Sinners - your favorite Sin's tale

not-so-short story inspired from Sins of a Solar Empire

Sinners

 

***Sinners has been discontinued. See last page for details.***

 

Sinners is currently (as of Febuary 15)...172 pages!

Part 2 HAS BEGUN! Here's the teaser for those of you who haven't seen it yet, or would like to be reminded of what's to come.

Part 2: Destruction

Teaser

 

 

Kol:

captured by the vicious Mani'k, can Kol escape from the Vasari before he himself is turned into one of the Vasari? And even if he can manage to escape, the Guild of Marksmen is out there, looking for him...

Archie:

Sent back to his home planet to solve a streak of murders committed by a close friend, will he join the murderer? Or will he pay the ultimate sacrifice?

Zeke:

Forever battling for control of his body, Zeke's psionic powers are growing stronger, and Alfr'eda is growing frightened. Can a Silent One rejoin the Unity? What would that mean for her? In the meantime, there are Sinners to purge. But her next target may be the most difficult and dangerous yet....The Prime Chancellor himself.

Jessica:

After the great Admiral Kol mysteriously disappears, Jessica steps up to pick up the empty seat of power. But others want the coveted Admiral position as well, and they will stop at nothing to get it. Does the "female Kol" have what it takes to reach Admiralty without the powers of a Marksman? Or will she just be a listing in the number of dead as the contestants fight to the death--for some of them--literally?

Veronica:

Her power taken away "indefinitely" by Haiti, she is forced to hide herself as one of the Vasari's Mani'k. Will her loyalty to the Unity remain strong enough to do what she must with the human prisoner? Or will she help Kol escape to rebel against Haiti in the only pitiful, desperate way she can? And if she aides the terran, will Kol return the sympathy or will he himself capture her?

Agent Karridan:

An Advent spy sent to the Trader worlds to discreetly scout out psionically-active humans that could be spared the destruction of the Reemergence, he hears rumors of a mysterious and deadly killer, and finds himself strangely intrigued. Sneaking into a recent crime scene, Karridan notices a faint psionic residue, and immediately stashes himself in Archie Kol's team as they hunt the murderer. The resulting explosion when he comes into contact with Zeke and Alfr'eda? A thousand suns undergoing supernova will not compare.

Professor Newman:

Working himself near to exhaustion, trying furiously to complete his project before command shuts him down, Newman is running out of time. For himself and for the TEC. Will he succeed? Welcome to the Novalith Project.

Sinners on Blogspot:

http://cisinners.blogspot.com/

 

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Reply #251 Top

Quoting israil, reply 24
its typically a shooting "gallery" not "galley"
End of israil's quote

woops typo thanks for catching that.

i think i corrected them all, but if i missed a couple, point them out to me. thatd be great.

Reply #253 Top

Nice. Sorry I haven't commented in a while. Been busy. As for for the story, I have no complaints for the last chapter. It was great. Keep up the good work

Reply #254 Top

Chapter 9, part 3
Commodore

 

The Trader Emergency Coalition

 

8 years ago, galactic position 305, 835, planet christened "Liberty"
aboard
TDN Aegia

 

    "Damn it man, I said no!"
    Kol arched an eyebrow.
    "Don't give me that look! I don't give a rat's ass about your rank! I let it go before, but by the stars in Olympi I won't let it this time!"
    Kol sighed. "They are a threat to me, Judman. Surely you can see that. What else can I do with them?"
    Judman massaged his temples. "What about their behavior now? These past weeks? Have any of them raised so much as a finger to you? No! They haven't called command or they would have blown up this ship by now, so I say let sleeping dogs lie! They seem in awe of you, why would you harm your most fervent supporters?"
    "But they are a security risk!" Kol insisted.
    "To who? You? What security risk? That you're a Marksman? Star's light in heaven, the whole fleet knows that by now! Are you going to torture the entire fleet?"
    Kol gave another exasperated sigh. "You're right, of course. You always are, damn you."
    Judman sighed also, in relief, privately thanking the stars Kol knew when to back down. But he had to make sure.
    "So you'll leave them alone?"
    "Yes, yes!" Kol waved his arm as if pushing the matter away. "Fine I'll...what did you say? Let sleeping dogs lie?"
    Judman nodded. "It's an old Earth saying."
    "Earth," Kol whistled softly, his eyes glazing over, "now wouldn't that be something to discover..."
    "I surely hope you're not one of those star-crossed fools who think they'll stumble across it by soaring randomly through the galaxies," Judman said wryly, "everyone knows our ancient homeland is lost to the stars forever."
    "Perhaps," said Kol thoughtfully, his eyes far away, "one day someone will find it."
    Judman shrugged. "Either we will or we won't. That's the way of the universe. But surely you didn't call me here to shout at me and discuss ancient fairy tales?"
    "Earth isn't a fairy tale, Judman," Kol said, frowning, "but no, that isn't what I called you here for. Take a seat."
    Judman sat.
    "First of all," Kol said with a twinkle in his eye, "I'd like to congratulate you, Major Judman, on your newest shiny little toy."
    Judman raised an eyebrow in confusion.
    Kol grinned. "Judman, I am proud to present to you, beamed straight from Command this morning, the Red Diamond of Outstanding Initiative medal."
    Judman's eyes popped. Kol laughed again.
    "I know, right? Like babysitting me gives you the right to the Red Diamond. Well, go on, take it. If you keep drooling like that some flies will come around and have a pool party on your lap."
    "This is...incredible," wheezed Judman, "this is so...so..."
    "Unlooked for? Undeserved? Unwan...not wanted?"
    Judman grinned. "You work on that spelling, I'll work on polishing my new medal. Hand it over!"
    "Haha, calm down, its right here. Seriously, Judman, you deserve it. It's been an honor learning from you."
    "It's been an honor? Son, don't make me laugh. You have a lot more to go through before anyone can consider you done with my teachings. You can find your way around without sinking, I'll grant you that, but you have a long way to go before anyone calls you commander, Commodore."
    Kol stopped laughing. "That reminds me, command dropped off an order along with your medal."
        Judman leaned forward. "And what's the order?"
    "I...we are to take Garuma, the desert planet beneath us."
    Judman nodded slowly. "The Vasari can't have ship factories down there, not after these weeks of no activity. If all they have are the remnants of the last battle that managed to escape, we could capture it quite easily."
    Kol nodded his head in agreement. "That's what command was thinking as well. After we take Garuma, we have orders to 'stabilize' the planet in preparation for colonization. A colony ship will be coming up by Hiske in a week, along with a small fleet to compliment ours, and command wants Garuma, and possibly any others we can squeeze from the Vasari, ready for colonization by then."
    "Stabilize," Judman snorted, "kill all the Vasari living on it is what they mean. Whatever. With your permission, Commodore, I have orders to send out to the rest of the fleet."
    Kol waved a hand and Judman departed. He owed that man so much. It was his tireless efforts, very nearly day and night since Kol's promotion, that had turned Kol into the reasonably competent leader he was now. He should have gotten a higher medal, if there was one. Rising to his feet with a creak of his muscles and a small sigh, Kol dimmed the lights of his private apartments and headed down the hallway. Humanity had been near desperation only a few months ago, with hundreds of worlds under Vasari control, but they were fighting back. Hell's fire, they were fighting back.

 

The Vasari

 

8 years ago, galactic position 411, 814, planet code named OREGION

 

    Flankx Sizkermahdi hissed into his goblet of shleme blood. Expansion was going well, and these terrans provided an infinite source of amusement, but preparations for the next Exodus should really have begun months ago. No Fleet Admiral Commander had ever tried to wait out the Darkness, to see how long they could hold off the next Exodus jump, and Flankx did not intend to become the first. He looked over to the faint bloodstain that outlined a Vasari's torso on the wall. Not after risking so much.
    A knock on the door startled Flankx, making him spill a bit of the shleme blood on his arm. He hissed in anger and waved his hand towards the door, unlocking it and allowing whoever was foolish enough to anger him in. Then his eyes widened in surprise. It was Aeb'nir, his personal spy in Num'pol's division. A division that had been decimated, with no survivors.
    "Sit," Flankx hissed softly, and Aeb'nir promptly fell to the floor, prostrating himself.
    "I beg humble forgiveness, Fleet Admiral Commander," he whimpered.
    Flankx's lip curled in disgust. Groveling dog. "Rise, and tell me how you alone survived the greatest loss to the Vasari since the end of the great Empire."
    "Oh Fleet Commander," Aeb'nir said again, raising himself only to stay on bended knees, "I and the other officers were ordered onto the evacuation pods when the Platinum was boarded. We all shot off, but I saw some being shot down, and I think I am the only survivor."
    Flankx's eyebrows rose. "Captured? The Platinum was not destroyed? Are you sure of this?"
    "Perfectly, Fleet Admiral," Aeb'nir said shakily, handing a large photo sheet displaying a human, "this human boarded our ship, and fought his way to the command center. I can only believe that Num'pol was killed. He stayed back to give time for our escape."
    One human?" Flankx's voice rose dangerously. "One human? And you fled? I should have you fed alive to the rankoras! And then what is not ripped to shreds blasted into space, so the Darkness can consume it!"
    Aeb'nir quivered visibly. "Please Admiral Commander! Give me a chance to explain!"
    Flankx threw his goblet of shleme blood at him. "Give me one good reason why I should not carve you into this wall myself!"
    Aeb'nir looked over to the still-visible outline of the previous Admiral Commander's body on the wall, outlined in blood. That was not an empty threat.
    Swallowing fearfully, Aeb'nir opened his mouth.
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    Flankx tapped his fingers together thoughtfully. "Unimaginable speeds, you say? Dangerous little things, then. If you are not lying to me..."
    "No, Admiral Commander!" Aeb'nir collapsed on the ground again. No Vasari could live with the shame of lying to a superior. Not unless they were planning a trick. "I beg you! Believe me!"
    Flankx hissed at him. "Get up, you worthless shriveling piece of hecer meat! Here is what will happen. You will take control of Num'pol's 2nd division."
    Aeb'nir looked up in surprise. "But Admiral Commander...there is no 2nd division. They have been decimated by the humans."
    "You will construct another, fool!" Flankx hissed. "I have some new blueprints I want you to look at. Give them to the Do'alli, the shipbuilders, and they will construct your new fleet. Go. Do not make me repeat myself."
    Aeb'nir fled from the room with the blueprints clutched tightly to his chest. Flankx sighed despite himself. If only that Vasari could keep the same neutral emotional block in his presence that he maintained with those he was sent to spy on. Although, if he ever acted with such impertinence to Flankx, his head would be rolling on the floor sooner than you could say davshich. Better he trembled. Soon the humans would tremble as well. They might have won a battle, but they have yet to win the war. Flanks clutched the picture of the human. Who was he? He had to find out.
    "Dai'shtani!" He roared into his desk speaker. "Bring me the Da'Mani'k!"
    The leader of the Mani'k would prove a challenge to this human. Any of the Mani'k would. They were assassins, trained from birth to obey none other than the Fleet Admiral Commander. Flankx smiled. And they moved faster than this human. Much faster.

Reply #255 Top

Could you put up a rank chart? Major to Lieutenant j.g.? kinda confusing

Reply #256 Top

Quoting Ackerman74, reply 5
Could you put up a rank chart? Major to Lieutenant j.g.? kinda confusing
End of Ackerman74's quote

yeah the major/lieutenant thing is a little screwy, but i didnt see that wen i was making up the chart. o well. its the future. things have been moved around. i hav the u.s. navy ranks on here cause thats wat i used to create the other race's ranks.

U.S. NAVY RANK

 

 

 

 

 

TEC

 

 

 

 

 

ADVENT

 

 

 

 

 

VASARI

 

 

 

 

 

Seaman Recruit

 

Apprentice

 

Acolyte Recruit

 

Slave

 

Seaman Apprentice

 

Senior Apprentice

 

Acolyte

 

Grunt

 

Seaman

 

Crewman

 

Cleric

 

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Petty Officer 3rd Class

 

Petty Officer 3rd Class

 

Minuscule Mindbattler 3rd Class

 

Slaver, 3rd Class

 

Petty Officer 2nd Class

 

Petty Officer 2nd Class

 

Minuscule Mindbattler 2nd Class

 

Slaver, 2nd Class

 

Petty Officer 1st Class

 

Petty Officer 1st Class

 

Minuscule Mindbattler 1st Class

 

Slaver, 1st Class

 

Chief Petty Officer

 

Chief Petty Officer

 

Chief Minuscule Mindbattler

 

Abdul Sentorian

 

Senior Chief Petty Officer

 

Private

 

Mindbattler

 

Minor Eliminator

 

Master Chief Petty Officer

 

Private first class

 

Senior Mindbattler

 

Senior Eliminator

 

Fleet/Command Master Chief Petty Officer

 

Corporal

 

Psiadvocate

 

Commander of the Deck

 

Warrant Officer

 

Sergeant

 

Psiwarrior

 

Invasion Specialist

 

Chief Warrant Officer 2

 

Warrant Officer

 

Senior Psiwarrior 4th Class

 

Head Bombardier, Rank 4

 

Chief Warrant Officer 3

 

Chief Warrant Officer 2

 

Senior Psiwarrior 3rd Class

 

Head Bombardier, Rank 3

 

Chief Warrant Officer 4

 

Chief Warrant Officer 3

 

Senior Psiwarrior 2nd Class

 

Head Bombardier, Rank 2

 

Chief Warrant Officer 5

 

Chief Warrant Officer 4

 

Senior Psiwarrior 1st Class

 

Head Bombardier, Rank 1

 

Ensign

 

Major

 

Manipulator

 

Eviscerate

 

Lieutenant, Junior Grade

 

Lieutenant, Junior Grade

 

Mind Controller, Junior Strength

 

Warrior of the Remnants

 

Lieutenant

 

Lieutenant

 

Mind Controller, Rank 1

 

Elite Warrior of the Remnants

 

Lieutenant Commander

 

Lieutenant Commander

 

Advanced Mind Controller

 

Tactician of the Fleet

 

Commander

 

Commander

 

Crusader

 

Sightblinder

 

Captain

 

Captain

 

Crusader of Truth

 

Captain

 

Rear Admiral, Lower Half (Commodore)

 

Commodore

 

Senior Crusader of the Unity

 

Coarse General

 

Rear Admiral, Upper Half

 

Rear Admiral of the Fleet

 

Fleet Master

 

High Captain

 

Vice Admiral

 

Vice Admiral

 

Fleet Premier

 

General

 

Admiral Chief of Naval Operations/ Commandant of the Coast Guard

 

Admiral

 

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Elite Subjugator

 

Fleet Admiral

 

Admiral Chief of Spacial Operations

 

Coalescence

 

Fleet Admiral Commander

 

u gotta giv the credit where its due: http://www.militaryfactory.com/ranks/navy_ranks.asp

Reply #257 Top

Great. Thank you for writing this

Reply #258 Top

part 2 teaser is done.

Reply #259 Top

Thanks. Seriously dude, this story is epic. Try to get it published, and here are the terms. To have it published, if the Ironclad people will even let you, you would have toget rid of the story on this website. I know that sucks, but it would be the only way. Did I mention it was epic

Reply #260 Top

Woah, I just read this for the first time...

I'm impressed... this is getting really good!

 

Sssssssinners....."

Reply #261 Top

Quoting just_jim, reply 10
Woah, I just read this for the first time...

I'm impressed... this is getting really good!

 

Sssssssinners....."
End of just_jim's quote

\o/   That's one on my utmost favorite parts. Chapter 2, part 2 if I remember right?

Reply #262 Top

Quoting HiddenMaster, reply 9
Thanks. Seriously dude, this story is epic. Try to get it published, and here are the terms. To have it published, if the Ironclad people will even let you, you would have toget rid of the story on this website. I know that sucks, but it would be the only way. Did I mention it was epic
End of HiddenMaster's quote

woops seems i skipped reading this before. yeah, thats also a thing. but im writing another story, so i hav been researching the publishing process, and if i got this published here's how it would hav to go.

first of all, get ironclad's permission for publishing. second, remove this story from impulse (probably hav to get a moderator for that, since posts that are deleted can still be found, just not edited). third, contact an agent and send a query letter for this story. big if if my letter intrigues them. if it does, then i send a couple chapters or the whole thing. and the publishing process MAYBE starts to get started.

but before that all, i would have to complete the story. no agents interested in a half-completed fiction story. so maybe if we contacted ironclad on the idea of getting this published and they agreed, i would just stop adding to this and complete it at home (without all ur great suggestions! :S    ). thats actually something worth looking into.

Reply #263 Top

OK EVERYONE LISTEN UP! I am going to contact Ironclad with the intention of getting their permission to get this published, but I need all your support! Show Ironclad (and my future agent, hopefully) how popular this novel would be by saying so! Please don't comment more than once, but everyone show their favor for getting this published! (or their favor in not getting it published).

Tell your friends to tell your friends and everyone vote! Lets see how many votes we can accumulate!

Reply #266 Top

GET IT PUBLISHED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!XD

DarkFallφ

 

Reply #267 Top

Quoting Juggernaut10, reply 15
Yea!

I don't think it'll work though. Sorry to be a nay-sayer (lol).
End of Juggernaut10's quote

y not?

Reply #268 Top

I don't know, it's just not something corporations do. Stardock seems to be a little oblivious of lore.

Reply #269 Top

Quoting Juggernaut10, reply 18
I don't know, it's just not something corporations do. Stardock seems to be a little oblivious of lore.
End of Juggernaut10's quote

that is true. But there's always the chance. I'll ask Ironclad once summer breaks over, and I'm back at my house.

Reply #270 Top

yea publish it

Reply #272 Top

Grudgningly, because it may mean cutting us off...lol... I have to also vote: Yes.

This is very good, and I'd seriously consider approaching a publisher if it were me.

Reply #273 Top

Published as in a book? I think a more likely thing would be official canonization.

Reply #274 Top

Quoting Juggernaut10, reply 23
Published as in a book? I think a more likely thing would be official canonization.
End of Juggernaut10's quote

all im getting from canonization is turning this book into a saint........i must say I don't follow your logic. Elaborate.

Reply #275 Top

If you were going to publish this get a Fanfiction account and post it there.These are great stories.

www.fanfiction.net